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Rhinocerous by ~joonbug:iconjoonbug:

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Drops of liquid sunlight
Found their way down from the canopy of thick green leaves
And dispersed themselves among us
He with the harmonica
Sat beautifully
Making love out of music
The specks of light found him brilliant
And danced upon the silver of his instrument for a moment
Before finally making their home in his eyes
Those eyes that made magic, that knew love
Across from him I sat
Observing quietly this great phenomenon
In which a pure soul first gave birth to infinities and impossible truths
Across from him I sat
Unheard and unknown
While dreamily he looked past me
And played a lovers song
For that wondrous angel
With the pink in her hair
©2002-2009 ~joonbug
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Author's Comments

umm, I wrote this one about Aaron...he was playing his harmonica under the tree at lunch, and it was pretty, so I wrote about it. Poorly written, very feminine...not one of my faves, but I put some effort into it, so, here tis.

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`rebelchic Nov 9, 2002, 9:20:59 AM
It's pretty good actually, but I thought it was gonna be about a rhino. :) (Smile)

The end was a bit confusing cause at first I thought you were talking about him but you shifted into talking about an angel.

But it's alright I got it now.

--
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~joonbug Nov 9, 2002, 1:11:43 PM
Hehe, I called it Rhinocerous because the first title I had for it, "Untitled" wasn't accepted by the machine! :( (Sad) So I just put down the title of the song I was listening to at the time, which was Rhinocerous by the Smashing Pumpkins. And yeah, Im very terrible at conclusions, really, its focus thats my problem...To clear things up: the poem was about the harmonica player, and really it was about how beautiful I thought he was and how invisible I am to him, and how he could only focus on that "wondrous angel". My regret is that it sounds kinda gloomy, because I know that Mr. Harmonica and Wondrous Angel make a good match, and I have no right to even try to get in between that...sorry for the lack of clarity, thank you for taking the time to read it, and thank you for your comments. I really take them to heart.

Your friend,
Heather

POCS
(Peace out cub scout)
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~perfectsadness Nov 9, 2002, 4:38:52 PM
hey i wonder who he is =) (Smile) ..... this is a great poem ..... i love it even though its "very feminine" ....
-Aaron

"give me a fu**ing kazzo and i could make better music than you"
-billy corgan
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~joonbug Nov 9, 2002, 5:20:41 PM
Thank you, Aaron
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